Welcome to the Mini-Mysteries Site! My name is Tiula, and I run the site -- feel free to get in touch if you have any comments, criticism or queries.
Here, I will upload mini-mysteries and stories regularly, mainly centred around my own creation, Detective Inspector Mark Carlton. To learn more about him, check out "About the detectives" link over to the right. Read, puzzle over, and enjoy.
Very good! But I noticed something else that threw me off a bit. In the second paragraph, the character with point of view takes her hand and finds that it's cold. But later, he touches her hand again and finds that it's still warm, drawing the conclusion that she was killed recently. Was that intentional?
Reading it back, I admit it does seem a little conflicting. I wrote it intending the first "cold hand" to be an effect of the event, adrenalin, etc. (I wrote this just after having worked in a play with a very similar scene, and the man playing Mike - the actor carrying the corpse - mentioned that her body seemed cold because everything seemed so very real.)
Very good! But I noticed something else that threw me off a bit. In the second paragraph, the character with point of view takes her hand and finds that it's cold. But later, he touches her hand again and finds that it's still warm, drawing the conclusion that she was killed recently. Was that intentional?
ReplyDeleteThanks! Glad you liked it.
ReplyDeleteReading it back, I admit it does seem a little conflicting. I wrote it intending the first "cold hand" to be an effect of the event, adrenalin, etc. (I wrote this just after having worked in a play with a very similar scene, and the man playing Mike - the actor carrying the corpse - mentioned that her body seemed cold because everything seemed so very real.)